It is a very dramatic piece of writing and me, Rebecca really like dramatic things, we also like that you used a lot of description and we can tell you read through it before you posted it on you’re class blog. well done it is really great. if I had to rate it out of five stars I would rate it 5 stars. so would Rebecca. it uses good vocab and I think you should write another short story and we are totally looking forward to reading it. Once again WELL DONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
that was very dramatic me and daisy like dramatic. we can see that you have worked hard and read over it before you put it on your class blog. well done!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It’s good but make sure you add more detail
It is a very dramatic piece of writing and me, Rebecca really like dramatic things, we also like that you used a lot of description and we can tell you read through it before you posted it on you’re class blog. well done it is really great. if I had to rate it out of five stars I would rate it 5 stars. so would Rebecca. it uses good vocab and I think you should write another short story and we are totally looking forward to reading it. Once again WELL DONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
that was very dramatic me and daisy like dramatic. we can see that you have worked hard and read over it before you put it on your class blog. well done!!!!!!!!!!!!!
10\10 would read it again