Baby Lion

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3 Responses to Baby Lion

  1. rousm says:

    I loved your post. It was cool! But you can’t start a sentence with and.Also you need a comma in between pillow and he. Apart from that it was great!

  2. mayhh says:

    good punctuation but i think there should be a bit more writing but well done other wise good

  3. eliom says:

    I liked your story but i think you could do a bit more description 😉 James and Max

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